I played thru what I’ve been working on these past few weeks, and oy, does it sound distorted and weird. Not sure that’s the worst thing, but it’s defnitely not my clearest writing. Maybe I’ll take it apart for strands that are good, discard some of the things that don’t work, find some others that might. If Dom hadn’t written all these parts in that refer back…well, he gives the option of which ones I’d like to reprise, but even as I have several that work together, they don’t all work together. And once you try to fit things that don’t naturally fit, there’s trouble. Better to start with smaller motives? The thing has to move somewhere as a unit, which can be done a few different ways, although the one I’ve been trying seems mechanical at the moment. Want to get back to the emotion — anxiety, fear, frustration…